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Some people think watching movies is a waste of time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, a group of people, argue that spending period on watching movies is not going to have a value for the time and some group opposes
this
, saying that watching the film is not a waste of seconds. In my opinion, watching the screen is not spoiling the time and I encourage the individuals to see. The following essay state points to support my opinion.
Firstly
, in recent years, so many varieties of screens
such
 as, comedy, emotions, and the fights are there in the country. Citizens can choose which one they have to watch depends on their mood and the interest. They are taking film as a period of getting relaxation from their busy work-life schedule.
For instance
, India has more than 10 theatres in one region and can offer all types of screen to the audience. After the movie, most of the viewer's are feeling relaxed. An increasing number of cinemas are an example of arguing, that the people are not taking it as an unwanted time.
Secondly
, we can observe that most of the movies are realistic and are directly taken from the society. After watching the act, sometimes we get a real idea what actually happened in our country and how we can be caution in the future.
For example
, in Kerala, one screen with a name Virus was released, which is directly written from the incident happened in Kerala. One virus attacked Kerala and it triggered a contagious disease. The film was exactly the same. By seeing
this
, we can say that screens actually helps us to understand the situations. In conclusion, in my observation, spending day to watch a movie is not a waste of period as most of the movies have influences of the society and they act as good media to get the relaxation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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