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Do you agree or disagree? Reading fiction (such as novels and short stories) is more enjoyable than watching movies.

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It goes without saying that in
such
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 a sophisticated world where people are more involved in their daily life that it could hardly be believed, people have to use their
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 efficiently. It is
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 important to enjoy our free
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. A controversial question which is often raised regarding
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 concept is which
one
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 of reading
fiction
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 or watching movies is more enjoyable for people. Some people are inclined toward the attitude that watching movies is more enjoyable than reading
fiction
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 books while others look at
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 concept through a different lens. From my vantage
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, reading
fiction
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 is more delightful than watching movies. In following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons. The
first
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 exquisite
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 to be mentioned is that books provide more detail than movies. Movies, because of
time
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 limitation, omit some details or narrate the short version of
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the original story
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.
On the other hand
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, books contribute with more information and details as long as the author wants. In
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 regard, an individual can imagine the whole
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, characters and
scenes
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scenes, instead
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 of just watching them in
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the movie
a movie
movies
.
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, different people may hold different aspect of view. Sharing our view
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 about
fiction
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 books, is
one
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 of my
favorite
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 topic to talk with my friends. Since I
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, these debates sometimes give a great inspiration to apply in my own stories.
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 is my deep belief that, due to more detail in
books
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the books
, it leads to be more creative and improve our imagination.
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 the aforementioned reasons are the
first
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 ones which cross the mind at
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 glance, they are by no means the only reason available. Actually, there is another subtle
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 which must be borne in mind that books are more accessible than movies. Nowadays, thanks to high technology, almost all books have
E-version
an interpretation of a matter from a particular viewpoint
version
aversion
 beside
printed-version
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the printed - version
.
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, people can continue reading more or less
every where
to or in any or all places
everywhere
. The noteworthy refreshingly intelligible statistics, revealed by a social research conducted in our country, show that more than 63 percent of people prefer to read books when they are using public transportation.
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, you can read a book any
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 you want.
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, I always read a short
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 before going to sleep. In brief, there is always a book ready for your enjoyment. To make a long
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 short, you can read books at any
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 and any place to improve your creativity and imagination. If
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 weights the merits and demerits of the above statements,
one
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 soon realizes that reading
fiction
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 books are more enjoyable than watching movies.

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