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Having money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

#money #time
Money
 is the most important subject that runs the present world. It is the only thing for which most of the people strive to lead their lives happily. In my opinion, both
money
 and
time
 are important for every individual. Lets discuss about the aspects about the importance of
time
 and
money
 in one's
life
 in the present study. In the
first
 scenario, if an individual has
money
 and less free
time
 it would affect the personal
life
 of the individual and leads to chaos. To eradicate it one can increase the free
time
 by spending more
money
 to buy
time
.
For example
, a writer can ask a typist to help to write a novel who will reduce his work and increase his efficiency and
also
 free
time
.
On the other hand
, in the
second
 scenario, if the
person
 has a lot of free
time
 and no
money
 he would die
for example
 a beggar has a lot of
leisure
time
, but he earns nothing and may die of hunger some day, unless he had a little
money
. If
that is
 the case the
person
 cannot have more free
time
 because any
person
 who like to have a splendid and happy
life
 need
money
,
Accept space
,
which has to be earned and
thus
 the extra free
time
 is spent for earning
money
 and in his free
time
 he would spend the
money
 to make his living comfortable. In simpler words a
person
 who workaholic can't have more
leisure
time
 and a
person
 who has more
leisure
time
 will not lead a happy
life
. To conclude the discussion, I would say that a sufficient amount of
money
 to lead a happy and
leisure
life
 is
best
Suggestion
better
 than both the scenario given above.
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  • financial security
  • facilitating
  • lifestyle
  • professional development
  • increased stress
  • work-life balance
  • hobbies
  • quality time
  • physical and mental health
  • financial constraints
  • luxury items
  • overall well-being
  • personal growth
  • middle ground
  • sacrificing
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