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Some people think that the main benefit of international cooperation is in the protection of the environment, while others believe that businesses mainly benefit.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some groups of people think that the various international collaborations have a positive effect on the environment,
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 others state that it is only businesses that get a positive impact.
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 unions of different
countries
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 develop and enhance business perspectives, I believe that these partnerships
also
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 light up and have an impact on ecosystem issues. On the one hand, the main reasons for international unions are
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 development of economic relationships and good perspectives for future generations.
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 one of the significant contracts which was signed by Azerbaijan, Georgia and Turkey refers to
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the transportation
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 of oil through these
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. The contract involved various specialists and opened many perspective job opportunities for people and is profitable like a project.
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 usually unions play an important role in the positive change of the economies of
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 which are involved in grand projects.
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, there are many international cooperation of
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 which bring to attention the environmental issues with the aim to solve them.
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, COP 29
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took place in Azerbaijan
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 November 2024.
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 event brought to attention the real problems which face all nations nowadays like climate change, decarbonisation, and water and air pollution. The aim of the conference which involves several
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 is to take action and preserve Mother Nature for the future by using alternative sources of energy and minimise
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the negative
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 effects of manufacturing.
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 today there is a lot of evidence that global engagements have a positive impact on the ecosystem. In conclusion, though the core aim of the partnerships of different
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 usually is the creating new ways of businesses and gaining money, it is obvious that environmental problems play a pivotal role and a lot of attention and funds are involved in that field as well.

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task achievement
Try to expand the explanation of how international cooperation specifically benefits businesses, beyond just economic perspectives. Providing concrete examples and more details can enhance the understanding of this view.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that transitions between ideas are smooth and clearly articulated. Words like "furthermore" or "in contrast" can help in moving between points neatly.
task achievement
The essay provides a balanced discussion of both views, effectively outlining the benefits to both the environment and businesses.
coherence and cohesion
Clear structure with a strong introduction and conclusion, guiding the reader through the argument logically.
task achievement
Good use of specific examples, such as the Azerbaijan-Georgia-Turkey oil transport contract and COP 29, to support the main points.
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