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Students should live with parents rather than live away from home when studying at university. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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After the industrial revolution, there was a surge in middle class families pursuing higher
education
 and breaking the norm of living average lives.
This
 brought into light, the value
education
 adds to one's life and saw a surge in the number of students pursuing higher University
education
. While
this
 was a positive change, it changes the fundamental ways in which
education
 was attained. Good universities were based far out from where
aa
indefinite article, "an" is use before a vowel sound, "a" otherwise
a
 student was based and often, the student would either be required to travel or live near the University. I believe living away from
home
, exposes a student to a lot more challenging and difficult situations, which he would not have faced if he lived in a protected environment at
home
.
For example
, living alone in loves managing your finances, your
timescales
 and priorities and most importantly, socialising with fellow students. The latter is often neglected when we speak about
education
, but in my opinion, is one of the most important soft skill required in the real world. On the flip side, living alone as a teenager
also
 entails the risk of falling
in
Suggestion
into
 bad company, not realising your responsibilities and
as a result
, having a significant negative impact on your future. It is not uncommon for teenagers
to enjoy
Suggestion
enjoy
 the freedom from constant supervision of the parents, and carelessly follow the path that doesn't need anywhere. Drugs, alcohol misuse and suicide rates are at a record high in University students across the world.
Thus
, to conclude, I would like to say that there are pros and cons of living away from the
home
.
However
, if done right, I believe it prepares the students for the real world in much better ways than the nested
home
 environment can ever do.

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