In today's world, people are purchasing more than what they need. Is this a positive or a negative trend? Give your opinion with reasons and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Due to

drastic change

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drastic changes

the drastic change

economy

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the economy

the purchasing power of people

have increased

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has increased

, leading to over purchase or purchasing of non-useful things. I ruminate that we should spend according to our income and save money for rainy days.

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, lets look at some of the positive effects. As per census - 2013, per capita income of urban areas have increased

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up to

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%, which

means that people are earning enough money for living. And the positive effect is their access to luxury and better standards of living.

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, they can have their own house, car etc.

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Which

was earlier in urban areas was a far away dream.

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, the tendency to purchase more comes with

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a lot

lots

of negative effects. One of the major effect is people tend to spend more than their

pocket leaving

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pocket, leaving

them with major debts and no savings. Another significant reason is young children are spoiled with excess luxury.

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Recent surveys

A recent survey

in various metro cities showed that

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the percentage

of children of parents from

upper middle class band

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the upper middle class band

prone to various diseases like obesity, diabetes is more than other children. Parents without realizing the side effects buys their children all latest gadgets and gaming equipments which confines them in

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a house

the house

with no inertia leading to

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life threatening diseases.

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, we can overcome these negative effects if earning parents start planning and confine their spending to

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a certain

extend every month.

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, government can support by building more activity centres in various

society

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societies

encouraging children to leave their equipments and play games involving physical activities. I doctrine that these initiatives would definitely bring negative effects of over purchasing down.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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In today's world, people are purchasing more than what they need. Is this a positive or a negative trend? Give your opinion with reasons and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Fully explain your ideas

You recently bought a children’s toy online but when it arrived it was damaged. Write a letter to the manager of the toy shop. In your letter: • describe what the problem with the toy is • suggest how the damage may have happened • say what you would like the manager to do

Nowadays the environmental problems are to big to be manage by individual persons or countries. In other words, it is an internationl problem. to what extend do you agree or disagree?

Some think the best way to motivate and encourage people to work hard is to pay them based on how much they produce and sell. To what extent do you agreee or disagree with this opinio

It is important to use land for human needs such as farming, housing and industry than to save it for endangered animals. Give reasons for you answer and include any relevant examples from you own knowledge or experience.