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More and more parents are allowing their children to play on computers and tablets as they think that children should learn technology skills. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Now is the era of technology,
therefore
 more and more parents believe that playing computers and tablets is a reasonable method to help their young offspring improve relative abilities. In my opinion, under a good parenting arrangement that
this
 phenomenon brings a more positive development than the negative part. To my maid, using computers and tablets is the most effective way for children to learn and practice skills.
Firstly
, the latest information and knowledge are often published on the internet and computers are devices that use the internet which is monitored by parents easily.
For example
, they could limit the range of resources and control the time of play via certain specialized software for children,
such
 as Green Net Work and Advanced IP Scanner.
Secondly
, a good study plan could not only improve children’s ability, but
also
 stimulates their creativity.
For instance
, there is a course named The Little Engineer in Shenzhen where is the Silicon Valley of China, the training course is designed for ages 6 to 10, and they were instructed to use custom software for programming. There is an amazing result been find, all kids are enjoying the study and most of them can create a new program after 6 months learning, and some of their ideas were purchased by large IT companies.
However
, everything has two sides, if children have unrestricted access to the PC or tablets, they may be adversely influenced. Because many online information and games are full of violence, pornography and the dark side of society.
For example
, a famous online game called the GT5, in the game player is playing a role as a gangland, they can rob and kill civilians at will. These might make kids become violent, and phenomena like bully and violence at school increase.
Thus
, parents should take the responsibility to control
this
 situation,
otherwise
, the consequences are worrying. In conclusion,
although
 playing computers and tablets has some negative effects, it still is a good method for children learning and training their technology skills and abilities, if
this
 under an effective arrangement.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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