International sporting events could contribute greatly to peace and stability in the world. Do you agree or disagree? Support your opinion with relevant examples

Sports events
been
the state or fact of existing
being
played internationally creates peace and provides
stablity
the quality or attribute of being firm and steadfast
stability
between the nations and its people by making them play together on same playground and sometimes sharing even a cup of tea.I agree to
such
events
been
the state or fact of existing
being
conducted, due to the fact that nowadays people of
such
countries are not found sitting together and not even speaking to each other due to the political problem and disturbances created by the ministers even if
such being is
Suggestion
such a being is
living in
same state
Suggestion
the same state
for a decade now.
Also
,
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,
Such
games not only gives a sense of enthusiasm within
such
folks, but
also
forces them to join the public of rival playing nation in one ground and even make them share
same seats
Suggestion
the same seats
sometimes which I believe would have been
next
to impossible without
such
play.
Moreover
,
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,
These matches
been
the state or fact of existing
being
played are more friendly,
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
a
competetion
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
computation
and
its
it is
it's
often seen that some players in the match are sharing
there
of them or themselves
their
stuff with opposition
players
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players, for
for instance
a match between India and Pakistan it was found that Virat Kohli the captain for
indian
a member of the race of people living in America when Europeans arrived
Indian
cricket team during the practice session gifted his bat to one of the players of Pakistan, which not only created a sense of appreciation from both the nation in the game of cricket.But most of people from both the countries found that people of India
doesnt hold
Suggestion
don't hold
doesn't hold
any type of rivalry within them against
there
of them or themselves
their
nation and people.The impact of
such
activity was seen in other Indian matches
played
Suggestion
Played
against other nations where the Pakistan supporters shared same seats with Indian
supportes
sustained or maintained by aid (as distinct from physical support)
supported
supporters
sports
and supported India throughout the ICC World cup matches 2019.
Last
but not the least I believe its not the rivalry which divides the
people but
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people, but
its
it is
it's
an opportunity which is not often given to the nations to come together and play hand in hand which is a sad part of today's world.

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