International sporting events could contribute greatly to peace and stability in the world. Do you agree or disagree? Support your opinion with relevant examples

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Sports events

been

the state or fact of existing

being

played internationally creates peace and provides

stablity

the quality or attribute of being firm and steadfast

stability

between the nations and its people by making them play together on same playground and sometimes sharing even a cup of tea.I agree to

such

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events

been

the state or fact of existing

being

conducted, due to the fact that nowadays people of

such

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countries are not found sitting together and not even speaking to each other due to the political problem and disturbances created by the ministers even if

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such being is

Suggestion

such a being is

living in

same state

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the same state

for a decade now.

Also

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Such

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games not only gives a sense of enthusiasm within

such

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folks, but

also

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forces them to join the public of rival playing nation in one ground and even make them share

same seats

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the same seats

sometimes which I believe would have been

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to impossible without

such

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play.

Moreover

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These matches

been

the state or fact of existing

being

played are more friendly,

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then

conjunction used in comparatives

than

competetion

a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers

competition

computation

and

its

it is

it's

often seen that some players in the match are sharing

there

of them or themselves

their

stuff with opposition

players

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players, for

for instance

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a match between India and Pakistan it was found that Virat Kohli the captain for

indian

a member of the race of people living in America when Europeans arrived

Indian

cricket team during the practice session gifted his bat to one of the players of Pakistan, which not only created a sense of appreciation from both the nation in the game of cricket.But most of people from both the countries found that people of India

doesnt hold

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don't hold

doesn't hold

any type of rivalry within them against

there

of them or themselves

their

nation and people.The impact of

such

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activity was seen in other Indian matches

played

Suggestion

Played

against other nations where the Pakistan supporters shared same seats with Indian

supportes

sustained or maintained by aid (as distinct from physical support)

supported

supporters

sports

and supported India throughout the ICC World cup matches 2019.

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but not the least I believe its not the rivalry which divides the

people but

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people, but

its

it is

it's

an opportunity which is not often given to the nations to come together and play hand in hand which is a sad part of today's world.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

4.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

311 words

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International sporting events could contribute greatly to peace and stability in the world. Do you agree or disagree? Support your opinion with relevant examples

Fully explain your ideas

Schools should focus on academic success and passing examinations. Skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork should not be taught at school as it is better to learn these from family and friends. To that extent do you agree or disagree.

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In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

In some countries today, people are having their first child when they are older. What are the reasons for this? Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone app is becoming increasingly common. Does these development have more advantages or disadvantages?