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Some people prefer to live in hot climates, whereas others love the lifestyle in countries with cold climate. Discuss both the view and give your opinion.

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Meteorologic
condition
 is a significant factor for the
country
 and its living creature. It is a contradictory argument whether people love to reside in scorching
condition
 or in severe cold temperature.
Although
 both types of weather have own characteristics, from my point of view, I prefer to live in a snowy area for some certain reasons.
First
 and foremost, the climate of winter makes the
country
 calm and quiet.
Hence
, people of that
country
 are a bit sluggish at work. For that reason, they do not open the shop quite often and
this
,
Accept space
,
 eventually, succours to reduce spending money.
For example
, people who live in Singapore, hot in temperature, tend to do a lot of shopping which not only increases economic growth, but it
also
 helps to develop the
country
 financially while people in Russia, do not like to consume excessively, because shops are not frequently opened.
Furthermore
, since markets are opened for a limited time, the whole
country
 looks peaceful and free from the hustle and bustle.
Therefore
, the bitter climate of western countries seems very detached as it is not noisy, which is preferable to me.
In contrast
, tropical countries are, invariably, different from foggy regions. The reason is that, people are agile, acute, industrious.
For instance
, Asian people are more energetic and can do labour intensive work.
As a result
, the economic
condition
 of Asian countries has been skyrocketed these days.
In addition
, older people discover that living in humid and sultry
condition
 succours to reduce age-related diseases.
Therefore
, residing in the torrid areas has its own benefits. In conclusion,
although
 there are myriads of advantages dwelling in hot temperature, cooled countries have
also
 some privileges which are very lucrative for me, so I prefer to live in cold countries.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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