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The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems due to being over weight is increasing. What is the reason for the growth in overweight people in society. How can this problem be solved.

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The enormous growth in the use of the internet over the
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 decade has led to radical changes to the way that people consume and share information.
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 serious problems have arisen
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 of
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, there are solutions. One of the
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 problems of the internet is the ease with which children can access potentially dangerous sites.
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, pornography sites are easily accessible to them because they can register with a site and claim to be an adult. There is no doubt that
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 affects their thoughts and development, which is a negative impact for the children and for society. Another major problem is the growth of online fraud and hacking. These days, there are constant news stories about government and company websites that have been hacked, resulting in sensitive information falling into the hands of criminals. It is important that action is taken to combat these problems. Governments should ensure that adequate legislation and controls are in place that will prevent young people from accessing dangerous sites,
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 as requiring more than simply confirming that you are an adult to view a site. Parents
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 have a part to play. They need to closely monitor the activities of their children and restrict their access to certain sites, which can now be done through various computer programs. Companies must
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 improve their
onsite
taking place or located at the site
on-site
 IT security systems to make fraud and hacking much more difficult by undertaking thorough reviews of their current systems for weaknesses. To conclude, the internet is an amazing technological innovation that has transformed people’s lives, but not without negative impacts.
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, with the right action by individuals, governments and businesses, it can be made a safe place for everyone.
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