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Relevance of health care facilities to healthy living. discuss both views

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There is a popular saying that
health
 is wealth. While some people may argue that good
health
care
 do not guarantee healthy liveness, I am of the opinion that the quality of available
health
care
 facilities
contribute
Suggestion
contributes
 tremendously to the well being of the populace.
This
 essay will discuss both views. My reasons are not far fetched.
Firstly
, medical facilities put in place to provide the required
care
 in the times of need, assist to provide the assurances of prompt medical attention;
hence
 improving the chances of survival.
For example
, about 30 percent of rural women in Nigeria die during childbirth
as a result
 of non availability of facilities which should have ensured regular antenatal and postnatal
care
.
Similarly
, there is a 27 percent death rate arising from road accidents in Nigeria
as a result
 of non availability of paramedics in most of the cities in the country.
In addition
, properly equipped diagnostic laboratories help with an understanding of the
health
 condition of patients before the illness gets to advanced stages where it becomes difficult to curtail.
For instance
, 20 percent mortality rate for cancer patients in Malawi is attributable to late detection.
Conversely
, some folks are of the view that no matter how well hospitals are, human beings are destined to die.
This
 spans from religious believes that death is compulsory for all mortals. An example is the fact that even the doctors who give
care
 to patients
also
 die eventually. In summary, adequate and proper
health
care
 enhances the quality of lives. It helps to reveal the status of patients in good time.
Thus
 providing the opportunity for swift response and referrals to facilities with experienced personnels with professional expertise.
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