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The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Internet
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The internet
 has become the necessity of our life. It has revolutionized the communication of
modern era
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the modern era
 and has
change
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changed
 the way to
access
information
 across the world. I agree with
this
 statement to an
extent and
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extent, and
 in
this
 essay, I will highlight merits and demerits of it. On one hand,
Internet
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the Internet
 has provided ease in one’s life from browsing an article to buying a house. Nowadays, one can simply search for an article and get the
information
 in seconds. One does not need to wait or look through books to get the required data. With the advent of
internet
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the internet
,
access
 to
information
 has become very easy without spending any effort to look for it. People can browse the required
information
 in mere seconds.
For instance
, if a student wants to read an article for his homework, he can browse over the internet and can get the required
information
 quickly.
On the other hand
, there are some downsides
as well of
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as well as this
this
 great invention.
Firstly
, it is really difficult to control the
access
 to
information
 and with
such
openness it
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openness, it
 can cause a negative impact on young generation especially kids.
For example
, kids could browse adult sites if parental controls are not in place.
Secondly
, it is not guaranteed to have authentic
information
 over the internet. In order to browse anything,
person
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a person
the person
people
 needs to verify the source as there is quite a lot of fake
information
 floating around.
Finally
,
Internet
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the Internet
 has been used to propagate any agenda and to control
minds
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the minds
 of the people. Even political parties are using it as a tool to spread
information
 which could easily provide them edge over their opponents. One example of
such
 propaganda can be seen in the
last
 presidential election
of
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in
 the US, where Trump was accused to influence people via social networks. In conclusion, Internet is considered as the greatest invention of
this
millennium but
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millennium, but
 it has its own pitfalls from
access
 control to spreading fake news.
Therefore
, I firmly believe that it can be an excellent tool if used in a proper way.

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