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Many people these days travel far for work or spend more hours working. Does this trend have more sdvantages or disadvantages? What do you think about work-life balance?

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Increasing competition in all
human
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humanities
 disciplines has led to much longer working hours for most employees.
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, job openings are rarely found close to
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's place of stay.People have to either travel long distances or even stay away from their
famlies
a social unit living together
families
 on outstation postings.
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 trend has both advantages and disadvantages and it is not possible to speak in favour of
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 opinion. Economic centres of cities and towns are usually
few
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fewer
 nodes of high activity in the region. There is not enough space for everyone who works there to stay as well in the same area.
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Therefore people
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Therefore, people
 travel
trom
a giver or sender
from
 far to reach these nodes. The advantages of
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 trend are that
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 it opens up more opportunities for professional growth for
every
all people
everyone
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.
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, working in
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 an environment
keep
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keeps
one
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 in touch with all recent developments in the field which would not be possible in a simpler setting
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, a healthy work-culture is built over
time
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 which is beneficial for the society and the country. The disadvantages of
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 trend are that people have to spend many minutes or even hours to travel to and from work and
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 cuts down on the quality
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 that they spend with their family and children.
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, they are not able to devote
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 for activities like daily exercise, socialising etc.
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, spending too much
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 at the workplace may
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 have psychological implications for them. In my opinion, it is essential to have a good life-work balance for a happy and content existence. While we cannot say no to great job
opportunities even
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opportunities, even
 if they are far from home, at the same
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 we should try to see that we can make
time
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 for other important aspects of life as well.

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