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Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human's life. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Between the former and present times, many changes have occurred. But should
this
 mean that
one
 cannot benefit from the past as the current
life
 is not related to it? Whilst some people think of
this
 great gap as a big obstacle, others believe that both times are connected when it comes to
mankind
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 lives. On the
one
 hand, many argue that as we move forward in time,
life
 varies significantly to the extent that
one
 cannot learn
any
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from the previous moments to improve the current living.
One
 justification may be that the way of living is enormously different
due to
 the various mindsets we have
got
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nowadays; more freedom
offered
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 that the society was deprived
from
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 before.
For instance
,
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the
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education and work for women
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has
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 been a
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complete
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refused topic formerly, about zero per cent
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of women
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women
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of women
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 would have the opportunity to experience any
life
 other than the
one
 amongst the walls of
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her
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parents'
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parents
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 or
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her
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 husband's house.
One
 other obvious example, the widespread racism between black and white, when populations were evaluating each other meaninglessly according to the degree of
whitness
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whiteness
 your skin is. For these reasons, some have the viewpoint that we have overcome the
dull
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 of the past and as it was only a miserable
one
, it will not help us in our current
life
.
On the other hand
, others argue that even with massive variations between both intervals, it remains that we are all
same
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 human beings. We share the same basic needs and our preliminary ways of thinking are similar. Fresh magnificent technologies shall not help you during seeking
for
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survivals
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 at critical moments,
for example
,
sitiuations
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situations
 like drowning and how to remain as long alive as possible or how to ask for help at
such
 times. The catastrophic effects of wars for both countries, regardless
which
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one
have
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 won, are only shown from the ones that already happened to prove to us that war comes
in
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 no
postive
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positive
results
to
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any
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.
As a consequence
, I am convinced that
the
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history is
a
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essential for everyone and we can learn much from it. To put it
in other words
, living without having any clue of the past is like a baby depending on his mere memory, which is null. In conclusion, as time passes, mostly everything changes
that
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 it seems as if the two time periods; the past and present, have never been on the same planet. but despite these major differences we are surrounded by, shall
this
 mean that we cannot learn anything from the ones or the events which happened before us
.
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 I believe that we ought to learn from the past to build a better constructive future.
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