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The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing?

#internet #access #information
In these days, it is said that the availability and accessibility of news and
information
 have been increased because of
internet
 facilities. In my opinion, I completely agree that it is a blessing for the economy, the students and the general public. The
First
 and foremost reason why access to
information
 through the net is that it helps to expand business out of the national boundary. Through the
internet
, people get to know about the trade barriers, political and legal environment, which facilitate them to decide on the expansion of their trade.
For example
, by knowing about crime in South Africa many traders are now reluctant to set up their establishment and thereby reducing their business risk.
Therefore
, healthy and right business decisions make companies profitable as well as flourish the economy.
Secondly
, through the
internet
 students get an opportunity to learn more which produces better grades in their career.
Moreover
, nowadays, pupils can teach from online resources, which reduces the cost of purchasing the book
also
.
For instance
, the “Good Read” website offers free reading books, whereas many people cannot buy those books.
Thus
, through accessing books, students along with many people gather knowledge, which is indispensable to stay updated.
Finally
, the
internet
 makes the world a global village in which people live like a family. Different types of news help people to cope up as per contemporary fads.
For instance
, hiding
information
 about the faulty Samsung 9 model on the
internet
 makes people alert not to buy that.
As a result
, globally all individuals are benefiting from
internet
information
. In conclusion, the accessibility of
information
 is certainly a good thing as it helps our society and economy tremendously.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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