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Some people say there are more disadvantages of a car than advantages. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #car
After its invention
car
 has become quite popular over time. But there are
also
 different options about its advantages and disadvantages. In my
opinion it
Accept comma addition
opinion, it
 is quite
advantegious
giving an advantage
advantageous
 to have a
car
 as it gives you freedom and comfort. Convenience is a big advantage of having a
car
. Unlike train or bus, if you own a
car
 you do not have to wait for it to
goto
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go to
 any destination of your choice. You can just hop into your
car
 and drive away.
Also
, you
can chose
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can choose
 your own route to the destination yourself. If time is of the essence for you, a
car
 can
also
 come in handy. Because in certain cases you can reach a
places
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place
 faster if you are in an automobile than on a bus that has to stop at multiple stops. In case of emergencies like someone in your family gets ill and needs immediate hospitalization. You can drive them in your
car
 to the hospital quickly and safely.
This
 can
also
 prove to be life saving for them as well. For all of the above practical reasons it is very much advantageous to have
car
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a car
 of your own.
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