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Major cities in the world are growing fast, as well as their problems. What are the problems people living in cities face? How can they be solved?

In the modern world, major cities are expanding rapidly because more and more people are moving there. With the increasing population, the
problems
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 rapidly. Some issues they may
face
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 are
traffic
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, higher housing prices, and fewer job opportunities.
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, these
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 can be solved by building new roads, applying rent control rules, and encouraging investors to build companies. The first problem people living in cities may
face
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 is the growing
traffic
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. More individuals mean more cars, which can lead to
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 jams.
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 problem can be easily solved by constructing new roads to improve the country’s infrastructure. A good implementation of population can be seen in the city of Al Amirat in Muscat. Before the rising
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population, there was only one way in and out of Amirat.
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, with the increasing demand, a new road was built. The new mountain road split the movement of cars and significantly reduced the problem. The second issue they might
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 is higher rent prices. When the demand for housing rises, the rent value
also
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 goes up.
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, in the city of Amirat, the average rate for a 5-bedroom villa was 75 OMR per month;
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,
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 number nearly tripled by 2025
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 the demand. Setting rental control rules will help in the reduction of the asking price, offering a valid answer. The
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 setback they may
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 is fewer job opportunities. The expanding numbers of job seekers create the dilemma of fewer jobs, which can lead to unemployment.
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 can be reduced if we open the gates from outside to create new companies and force them to hire locals.
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, ever since Dubai opened its city for new developments, new opportunities have emerged for the citizens. In conclusion,
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 the cities’
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 rise with the
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 of people moving to
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, simple solutions can solve large
problems
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 like unemployment, high living costs, and
traffic
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planning
Plan the essay. Use a short intro, then a part for each idea, and end with a short finish.
content
Stick to clear facts you can explain. Some city names in the text are not clear.
content
Give one clear example for each point and leave out extra details.
coherence
Use link words to move from one idea to the next, like first, next, and finally.
grammar
Check spelling, and keep to easy form of use.
task response
The essay shows three problems and a way to solve them.
coherence
There is a short end that restates the ideas.
content
Some examples are given to show ideas.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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