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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

#people #choices
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It’s argued that nowadays we face too many different choices. And as far as I can tell, I completely agree with
this
 statement. There’s no doubt that it’s important to get enough
information
 before we make a final decision, so that we can more likely to make a comparatively best choice. And in my opinion, enough
information
 can at the same time give us more possible choices. As is known to all, technology has made it much easier to collect
information
 over
last
 several decades. Whenever and whence you are, you can simply take out your smartphone or i
pad
Suggestion
iPad
to find whatever you want on the internet.
For example
, there was a time when I had to choose my major in the university, but I hardly knew about the difference between the assorted majors. It was the internet I looked for help that made it clear for me and I could weigh the merit and adverse before I made the decision.
On the other hand
, I believe that the increasing choices can contribute to the development of business. To get more market shares and improve their sales, companies have created many products to attract customers to purchase, which could result in a waste of resources as well as our money and energy. Because lots of advertisements are inclined to e
xtragrate
the outcomes which make it harder for us to recognise a real w
orth
Suggestion
worthy
product. In conclusion, technology h
elp
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helps
us to collect more
information
 so that we will have many choices, while companies and their advertisements make it difficult to make a proper choice. So my firm conviction is that nowadays we do have too many choices.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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