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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this. Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Between finishing high school and starting
university
, the students are encouraged to work or travel for a
year
 in some countries. There are advantages and disadvantages as well. IN Terms of benefits, leaving your own country for work or randomly
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 is indeed beneficial for young people. It helps IN Having new experiences of lives, learning about new people’s new about and different culture and traditions. It
also
 helps IN Learning new languages. It can be really helpful in being an adult because of various events and accidents of
lifes
a characteristic state or mode of living
life
, it teaches In becoming a mature and better person.
Moreover
, having a
gap
year
 and doing a job could be beneficial
for
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in
 saving money for
university
 education.
For example
, there was
this
 girl who wanted to be a police officer but she couldn’t afford it. So, she started a job in her
gap
year
 and that proved really helpful for her in her
university
 education fees. There are harmful effects as well,
youngsthers
a young person of either sex
youngsters
 are immature and they
dont
do not
don't
 know what is good and bad for them which can be risky. It is expensive as well. Taking a
gap
year
 can be stressful as well, because of the expenses and learning new things and having different
experiances
the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities
experiences
. There are
alot
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a lot
 of people who decided to take a
gap
year
 and they turned out to be depressed. Some people
regert
deem to be
regard
regret
 taking a
gap
year
. IN conclusion, taking a
gap
year
 between finishing high school and starting
university
 education can be helpful and risky at the same time. But it
have
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has
 more advantages than disadvantages.
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