You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter:

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Dear Sir I am writing

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letter to express my interest and inquire about a seven days walking tour in the mountains that you are going to organise in the

october

the month following September and preceding November

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. I received your brochure regarding event, so I would like to collect information related to

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trip. I am very excited about the some adventurous

actvities

any specific behavior

activities

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as Paragliding, Sky diving, mountain climbing and so on that are included in

excursion

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the excursion

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last

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year I skipped the

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tour, now I do not want to

missed

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miss

the chance to

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wonderful

outway

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. It would be a kind act if you could tell me about the detail information of

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outing like total expenditure of

trip

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the trip

, accommodation, places to be

vistited

go to see a place, as for entertainment

visited

and meals. It would be great if you would provide the information to

dates

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date

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so that I would able to submit a leave application to my superiors. Since I am bit chubby, bit concerned about whether my obesity will make

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trip unfit to me. It would help if you could tell me regarding the precautions that must take to effectively take part in

organized event

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an organized event

organized events

. I am looking forward to your reply.

yours fa

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ithfully Kiranprit Kaur

manveersingh50242Thu Aug 29 2019

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

199 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

brochure
interested
walking tour
concern
fitness level
keep up
difficulty level
provisions
support
participants
struggle
prepare
recommendations
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