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You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter:

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Dear Sir I am writing
this
 letter to express my interest and inquire about a seven days walking tour in the mountains that you are going to organise in the
october
the month following September and preceding November
October
. I received your brochure regarding event, so I would like to collect information related to
this
 trip. I am very excited about the some adventurous
actvities
any specific behavior
activities
such
 as Paragliding, Sky diving, mountain climbing and so on that are included in
excursion
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the excursion
.
Moreover
,
last
 year I skipped the
such
 tour, now I do not want to
missed
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miss
 the chance to
this
 wonderful
outway
. It would be a kind act if you could tell me about the detail information of
this
 outing like total expenditure of
trip
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the trip
, accommodation, places to be
vistited
go to see a place, as for entertainment
visited
 and meals. It would be great if you would provide the information to
dates
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date
,
Accept space
,
 so that I would able to submit a leave application to my superiors. Since I am bit chubby, bit concerned about whether my obesity will make
this
 trip unfit to me. It would help if you could tell me regarding the precautions that must take to effectively take part in
organized event
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an organized event
organized events
. I am looking forward to your reply.
yours fa
ithfully Kiranprit Kaur
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