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Students should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught.  To what extent do you agree/disagree?

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Some people hold a belief that schools should be a place where students
study
 academic subjects to pass examinations rather than learn skills
such
 as dressing and cookery. In my opinion, despite the significance of academic
study
 and exams, students should
also
 be taught fundamental life skills. On the one hand, studying academic
knowledge
 is vital for students in many ways.
First
, examination results are essential for students’ academic record. With good results, they will have an advantage in the national high
school
 exams in which their academic performance after many years of
study
 is considered.
Second
, academic subjects equip students with fundamental
knowledge
 that will be used in tertiary education.
For example
, most undergraduates in Vietnam are supposed to pass subjects,
such
 as Microeconomics and Advanced Mathematics, which are comprised of mathematical
knowledge
 taught at high
school
. Without a deep understanding, students may fail the final exams and have to
study
 these subjects again, which is time-consuming and costly.
However
, there are several reasons why students still need to learn practical skills.
For instance
, when college students live far from family, life skills
such
 as cooking will be helpful
since
Suggestion
for
 students will be able to prepare healthy and affordable meals on their own
instead
 of eating out at restaurants. Attending skill-building classes at
school
 is
also
 an effective way for students to unwind after many hours of studying academic subjects. Through a wide range of activities, students are able to relax and
as a result
 perform better in exams. In conclusion, I disagree that students should only
study
 academic subjects because both academic
knowledge
 and practical skills are equally important and should be taught at
school
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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