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Band 7.5

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter explain why you would like the job give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I writing
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 letter to apply for the job of babysitting that I have seen in an advertisement in an Australian magazine. Because I like children a lot, I always have been looking for
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 kind of job where I can serve small children and be a part of an earlier stage of their lives. I have many years of experience in taking care of small kids in the aspect of health and food, playing with them and teaching them which can benefit you to get settled easily with me and even, It would be easy for me to become familiar with your kid. In my free time mostly I get the knowledge of caretakers, so I would like to get more information about your child's health which would guide me in the way of caring. If you need more information, please do not hesitate to contact me. Looking forward to hearing from you. Your Faithfully, Ankit

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coherence cohesion
Use more distinct paragraphs to separate different ideas or sections of your letter.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples or details in your letter to strengthen your task response.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately phrased for a formal letter.
task achievement
The overall tone of your letter is suitable for an application.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Childcare, Nurturing, Patience, Creativity, Early childhood development
  • Babysitting, Au pair, Engaging, Responsible, Enthusiastic
  • Safety, Trustworthy, Adaptability, Proactive, Cultural exchange
  • Activities, Educational games, Language skills, Exploring
  • Volunteering, Community involvement, Australian culture
  • Flexibility, Personal traits, Schedule, Enrichment
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