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With the increasing number of people travelling, there is a growing demand for more flights. What problems does this have on environment? What can be done to solve the problem?

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Nowadays, travelling from one place to another is becoming rampant, either
as a result
 of consistent migration of people for various reasons or due to seeking of pleasure as well as for business purposes. The rise in the quantity of people travelling have resulted in the increased need for more flights.
This
 essay will examine the possible effects which
this
 can have on the
environment
 and discuss the probable solutions to it.
Firstly
, one of the problems associated with flights is its detrimental effects on the
environment
.
End products
Suggestion
The end products
 of combustion from
aviation automobiles
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aviation, automobiles
such
 as fumes and chemicals are continually being emptied into the sea and oceans.
This
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Thus, as
Thus as
as a result
, leads to air pollution and causes depletion of the ozone layer which can
consequently
 be a hazard, as global warming is imminent. A
study which
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study, which
 was carried out recently revealed that chemical wastes generated from the aviation sector accounted for about 5% of the causes of water pollution which destroys the aquatic habitats.
However
, there are lots of
solution
Suggestion
solutions
 to
this
. The
government
 should enact stricter laws to protect the
environment
 and make sure they are duly adhered to. Airlines that offend
this
 rule should be given a grave penalty to show
government's commitment
Suggestion
the government's commitment
. Individuals should
also
 support the actions of the
government
 by paying their dues and taxes. In conclusion, individuals, aviation industries, and
government
, all have a role to play in protecting the
environment
.
This
 essay has discussed the effects of increased travelling rates on
nature
Suggestion
the nature
 and possible solutions to eliminate these harmful effects. It is recommended that people are encouraged to travel
lesser unless
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lesser, unless
 it is really important in order to conserve our
environment
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Global warming
  • Noise pollution
  • Wildlife disturbance
  • Resource depletion
  • Aviation industry
  • Air traffic congestion
  • Biodiversity
  • Habitat destruction
  • Carbon footprint
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