Now, people spend less and less time at home. What are the causes? What are the effects on individual and society?

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Now a

days

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day

, people spend less

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at home.In

present world

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the present world

, everyone thinks about himself they run after the money to get luxurious life. At

one

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point

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where a person who is fond of spending

time

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with friends, pubs casinos e.

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in order to get himself happy becoming far away from their family.There are different causes responsible for

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factor which are as follows. The

first

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main cause of

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problem is

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work pressure

or stress.Everyone is having work pressure in his job of some kind due to which he

feel

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feels

stressed

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and when gets a weekend

break he

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break, he

tries to enjoy himself in outdoors with friends and don'

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care about his family.If truly said, he

also

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considered family as a stress at

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point or another.

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communication gap

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the communication gap

is the main cause of

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problem. Both husband and wife are working due to which both don'

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get

time

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to communicate each other and their distances becoming far and far

everyday

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every day

same

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Same

when they get weekend break they tries to spend their quality

time

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with

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hang on with friends.

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problem

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cause a psychological

effects

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effect

on individuals as they are suffering from depression problems

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If, a family is not happy how

one

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can think to be happy.

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The

most important impact on society is social

distrubence

activity that is a malfunction, intrusion, or interruption

disturbances

as cases of divorce rising day by day

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as a result

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the ecological balance in the society is not maintained.Kids whose parents are

seperated

being or feeling set or kept apart from others

separated

have negative impact so

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one

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point they indulge themselves

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some crimes or in doing some some offensive things. It is a well known saying that 'values

always comes

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always come

from the family'. But in

present scenario

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the present scenario

, the meaning of family is totally changed.

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, It is concluded that

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introduces a conditional clause

a person wants a prosperous

life it

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life, it

is only possible if

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he has a happy family.If a family is

together

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together, then

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doesn'

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matter

wht

what thing

what

kind of situation is

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is better for everyone for maintaining a strong bonding

one

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should spend free

time

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at home

instead

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of giving importance to another.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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336 words

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Parents should be required to attend parenting courses every year to bring up their children well anbd give them a better environment for growth. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount that people can earn.