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The table shows consumer expenditure on three groups of goods and services in Ireland, Italy, Spain. Sweden and Turkey in 2002. Overall, the most proportion of consumer spending was
food
, drink and tobacco while spending on
leisure
 and education was least. Consumer spent on clothing and footwear more
leisure
 and education but less than
food
, drink and tobacco
Initially
, the comparing between percentage of
food
 and clothing spending. We can see that Turkey and Ireland had expense about 4-6 times of clothing, they spent 28-33% in
food
 but about 6% in clothing. There were 3 times in Spain and Sweden and less than double in Italy.
In addition
, the clothing spending proportion in each country was more than
leisure
 spending. Consumer in Spain spent on clothing about 6 times of
leisure
 spending, there were 6.43% in clothing, but a mere 2.21% in
leisure
.
In contrast
, consumer expenditure on clothing was more than
leisure
 just triple in Ireland and Italy and less than double in Sweden and Turkey. 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 11 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 11 1 1 1 1 11 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 11 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1

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