At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantage?

In some parts of the world
,
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,
the count of youngsters is greater that of
aged
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aging
people.
This
can be both advantageous and disadvantageous depending upon a particular situation. Youngsters are responsible for
country's development
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the country's development
a country's development
. Quality and quantity are the two factors that determines the direction in which a nation goes. For
instannce
an occurrence of something
instance
instances
instanced
,
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,
if more teenagers take up courses in the science and research inclination of the whole
country
or state will be towards the same.
For Example
, if more
number
of young individuals indulge in different activities other than taking academic education, the literacy rate of the
country
drops significantly.
On the other hand
, having large
number
of teenagers or youngsters may lead to one of the most problematic situation in today's world
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
.e.
unempolyment
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Unemployment
Unempolyment
. If there are
more
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a number
number
number
of applicants applying for a job
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
the total
number
of available vacancies
,
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,
the result will
umployment
the state of being employed or having a job
employment
implement
indefinetly
to an indefinite extent; for an indefinite time
indefinitely
.
For
example in
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example, in
India unemployment is one of the major issues because of which
country
is suffering.The
number
of applicants is nearly ten times greater than
total
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the total number
number
of job
seats
the piece of land on which something is located (or is to be located)
sites
. To sum up
,
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,
we can state that in a
country
where the count of youngsters is
greater is
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greater, is
beneficial for the development of
country
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the country
a country
.Until and unless the count is restricted to a
certian
definite but not specified or identified
certain
limit.If the
number
increases to a point where it results in unemployment, the advantage will become
disadvantage
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a disadvantage
. In my opinion advantages and disadvantages are
inter-related
reciprocally connected
interrelated
interested
,
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,
when considering the population of youngsters in a
country
.One outweighs the other
,
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,
depending upon the type of problem.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • innovation
  • skilled labor
  • social development
  • technology
  • dividend
  • competition
  • resources
  • social welfare
  • unrest
  • instability
  • healthcare
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