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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility to university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

#accessibility #university
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Nowadays, it is impossible for officials to recommend any admission or job in a well known
universities
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university
 based on their financial status.
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, I agree with the statement that
selection process
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the selection process
 in
university
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have
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has
 certain rules and regulations to
follw
to travel behind, go after, come after
follow
 according to their management. There are several steps are taken into consideration while doing
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university admission process
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the university admission process
.
Firstly
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,
university
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 seat is based on
twcnical
of or relating to technique or proficiency in a practical skill
technical
 skills and communication skills that are suitable
to
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for
 the
university
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education
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. Because of
this
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, universities are conducting competitive exams to know about capability of students that helps them to recruit students easily.
Secondly
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, universities are trying to become popular
whre
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
were
when
 they considering only
knowledgable
highly educated; having extensive information or understanding
knowledgeable
 students who are responsible to better
reputation
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the reputation
 of the college and make their parents proud too.
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, owing to limited number of seats available in universities, which they select students who are
upto
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up to
 the campus requirements and ideas.
For
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instance most
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instance, most
 higher institutions in Nigeria admit between 4000 and 10000 undergraduates annually.
Thus
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, since both the rich and the poor are subjected to
this
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 quota system, no one is favoured.
Moreover
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, it
provide
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provides
 scholarships to the students who are from middle class families. Owing to all
this
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, admissions in universities are only possible to those students who have matured skills in their
specialogy
in a special manner
specially
sociology
speciality
 of
education
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. Another important point is that, if universities allow any type of reservation, it may cause
severe effect
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severe effects
a severe effect
 on
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education system
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the education system
 and it spoil the life of people who are having good skills and ideas.
As a result
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, it leads to effect the development of
whole
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the whole education system
education
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 system by encouraging people to pay money
to
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for
 the
ducation
the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill
education
 which is not
afford
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afforded
 to the poor families. To conclude, I reiterate my statement by saying that
education
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 should be based on skills and knowledge, not on money and wealth. I hope that
education
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 has equal rights to each and every person irrespective of their financial status.

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