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Some people believe that robots are important for humans to develop their future, while others think that it is a dangerous invention that will impact society negatively. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Write at least 250 words.

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Our world starts to invest
time
 and money in the new
development
 of artificial intelligence, where the computer will think, manipulate and do the
work
 by itself. Some people supporting robots via through technology for the future, despite few folks think
this
 will be a gloom for our community. I pillar to develop our future with the help of robots. On the one hand, the world's population is skyrocketing, and the service to the plethora of consumers cannot fulfil with a limited workforce. To solve
this
 problem, the automation
machine
 can join hands with the workforce to make the
work
 quicker and easier.
For example
, in the manufacturing industry, the assembly of an engine could take the
time
 of more than an hour to assemble by the employees, but a single robot
machine
 can assemble the engine within a few minutes with the help of the preprogrammed in the
machine
. So, the human effort and
time
 to do
work
 have more considerable
time
 usage than a
machine
, and the accuracy and efficiency of a robot have a better result.
Moreover
, the human force can alter their effort in the essential
work
 part and can develop different skills.
On the other hand
, in most cases, the robots will be used for the fieldwork in a company. In every organisation, the maximum employee will be working in the fieldwork, if
this
 is the case,
then
 the employment of many workers would be reduced with the
development
 of
this
 automated
machine
.
For example
, the growth of the country can increase, but the economy of each family will face a decline due to these kinds of technology
development
.
In addition
, the laziness of humans would be higher when the automation
machine
 comes to easy their
work
.
This
 makes each individual have health problems. To recapitulate, each technology
development
 of humankind will have their pros and cons, but the situation demands to apply some electronic components to overcome some critical problem. I think that the automation
machine
 has a significant impact on humankind with more benefits and try to be a solution for many problems.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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