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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that government and individuals can tackle this problem

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It is a known fact that increasing population in cities around the world has resulted in different issues that must be addressed. These problems and possible solutions, which should involve both the authorities and the society, are discussed in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with, the increasing public presence in the cities has caused a rise in environmental pollution and crime rate. Human wastes namely faeces, urine and food wastes, accumulate from time to time;
consequently
 leading to the increased presence and proliferation of disease causing micro-organisms as well as parasites. These predispose the community to epidemic illnesses
such
 as cholera, malaria, and polio.
Furthermore
, the high rate of unemployment usually prompts individuals, especially the youth, to get involved in crime
such
 as armed robbery, house burgling, internet fraud and murder, in order to build a good esteem and to survive. The rise in insecurity may scare away investors and slow down the development of the city.
Nevertheless
, these negative effects can be reduced to a minimal level when the government invests more in basic amenities like water system and power supply, in rural areas; hereby discouraging urban migration in search of these facilities.
In addition
, the powers that be need to provide more jobs in proportion of the rising population and their effect. A classic example is the employment of sanitation workers to lower environmental degradation. In the same way, the society can assist the appropriate authorities by making more trade investments in their villages. By
this
, they will be able to empower their relatives without necessarily transporting them to the city for work. To recapitulate, despite the fact that the increased migration of people into the cities are accompanied by drawbacks, the governing councils together with the individuals can help to discourage
this
 trend. If no adequate measures are put in place, it may lead to serious and uncontrollable societal retardation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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