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Band 6.5

You applied for a job and were offered the position but have decided not to accept the offer. Write a letter to the HR supervisor with whom you interviewed. In your letter: - explain the reason why you are declining the offer - describe your reasons for staying with your current position.

Dear HR Supervisor, I am writing to inform you that I have decided not to accept the job offer I recently received.
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 I am grateful for the opportunity and appreciate the confidence you have shown in my abilities, I believe it is in my best interest to remain in my current position. The main reason for my decision is the stability and familiarity I value in my current role.
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, I am currently involved in ongoing projects that require my attention and commitment. I feel that switching jobs at
this
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 time would disrupt my professional growth and impact my performance. I want to thank you for considering my application and for the time you spent during the interview process. I hope we may have the chance to work together in the future. Yours faithfully, Amy Choi

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task achievement
Consider adding more details about your ongoing projects to strengthen your reasoning.
coherence and cohesion
Try to connect your ideas a bit more clearly for better flow.
positive
The letter is polite and maintains a professional tone throughout.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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