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Some people say that supermarkets should have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging for products they sell. Others say it is the responsibility of the consumers to avoid such products. Discuss and give your opinion.

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Although
, many believe that consumers are responsible for choosing products with lesser
amount
 of packaging, others still consider that it is the supermarkets' responsibility to reduce
this
 problem. In my view, the decision of supermarkets about reducing the
amount
 of packaging is very influential to the people's mindset and so, they are more responsible about
this
. On the one hand, some think that supermarkets have greater role in decreasing the
amount
 of product packaging as they are the seller and I agree.
This
 means that they have control over the goods that they sell and so as with the packaging that they use. Canadian supermarkets,
for instance
, are now keeping the volume of plastic packaging that they use in fewer amounts to help the country become plastic-free.
This
 has been influencing the public as they bring reusable bags for grocery shopping and opting not to use more plastic packaging.
On the other hand
, others argue that consumers share a big responsibility as well in keeping the number of product packaging low due to their freedom as buyers.
In other words
, individuals can fully decide which store sells products with lesser
amount
 of packaging. An example would be Amazon, which is an online supermarket, that allows people to choose how many packages per shipping.
This
 has greatly reduced the problem and
thus
, can help in the future generations to come. In conclusion,
although
 opinions of people vary, I consider that supermarkets share more responsibility on the issue of reducing the packaging amounts of goods as they have a huge control over their sales.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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