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Some psychologists say that doing absolutely nothing for a period of time each day is the key to decreasing stress in everyday life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Now a
days
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day
 doing nothing for a specific period of time is decreasing stress in everyday life according to some psychologists. I disagree with
this
 statement.
Firstly I
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Firstly, I
 would like to say, For a healthy and happy life one needs to be active. Doing nothing for a span of time a person becomes inactive, lazy and unhealthy which is not suitable for our body.
Additionally
, I would like to say a person
will
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Will
 become more stressful because he or she will think
negative
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negatively
 all the time as he or she has nothing to do which can worsen the condition of a person and can lead to more kind of disease. For a healthy lifestyle one should adopt healthy living and make
themselve
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
busy in
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busy, in
 which he or she is interested. They can follow their hobbies which will refresh their mind and make them feel better. To conclude, one should never sit
idly but
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idly, but
 to make
themselve
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
 busy in different types of activities not only which will help them to heal
better but
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better, but
 will make them healthy and fit which in future make their life happier.
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