Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

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Nowadays, a portion of society thinks that richness is the source of amusement in their daily living. Sufficient wealth enhances its facility for acquiring everything they desire.

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there are other ways which can make peoples’ life joyful like a good relationship, gaming. In

this

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essay, I am going to discuss how human beings lead their lives in the concept of money and other perspectives which give them eclectic feelings.

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of all, people having adequate wealth can access in every occasion and entertain themselves whatever they want to have. They could go for

traveling

the act of going from one place to another

travelling

or surfing, taste the dishes they know about, buy products they choose and spend on electronic items

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as a smartphone or laptop.

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, most rich people in Bangladesh have the tendency to buy the latest model cars and Apple phones where they could have

just easily pass

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just as easily pass

on using their old ones.

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, a recent online survey shows that women in Bangladesh like to do shopping when they feel upset. It enables them to forget their anxieties.

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, a good relationship

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helps people to live feasibly which could be marital or parental.

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, performing different kinds of sports activities

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encourages

peoples

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people

and make them

cheerful

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cheer

. By playing indoor or outdoor games one can stay healthy as well as refreshing. It

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ensures body flexibility which many experts claim today that a healthy relationship and physical exercise enhance people to live more happily and increases their longevity. In conclusion, I would like to insist that money can fix most of the life

difficulties but

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difficulties, but

sometimes there are far better options which money would not able to deliver. In some

context performing

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context, performing

religious manner, charity, building a non-profitable organization to help others could

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give happiness to human beings.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

298 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Financial security
Basic needs
Comfort
Luxury
Freedom
Altruistic
Philanthropy
Nurturing relationships
Fulfillment
Sense of accomplishment
Physical well-being
Spiritual beliefs
Community involvement
Gratitude
Mindfulness
Simple pleasures

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Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

Fully explain your ideas

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negative development?

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Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged others believe that children .Who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and and give your own opinion.?