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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study aboard. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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We now live in an age when many of us have a chance to
study
 in another country to get a university qualification. It is different from many years ago that students just stayed in their province and went to college, so let us consider what strengths and weaknesses studying aboard includes. Generally speaking, a student will benefit from living aboard and studying there.
Firstly
, every country has its diverse traditions and customs, so it is good for us to discover.
For example
, Chileans have a surprisingly unique New Year celebrating way is spending New Year's Eve with the dead.
Therefore
, some kinds of traditional celebrations like that probably make us curious and interested in.
Secondly
, we will have a chance to
study
 with effective and modern studying methods that help us to learn easily
such
 as theories combine practicing, going on an excursion, studying with smart televisions and robots, being encouraged to organize a community project,
etc
 so we will become more knowledgeable to develop our
countries
Suggestion
country
 when we return. Notwithstanding, getting foreign schooling
also
 has some drawbacks. Culture shock is one of them. We cannot be accustomed to it right away; it may take us two weeks or one month to adjust, especially for some of who have been familiar
to
Suggestion
with
 our country's lifestyles, it can take us years.
For instance
, Asians have difficulty being used to the greet methods are kissing cheeks and hugging each other when they
study
 in Western countries. Or some left-handed people feel uncomfortable in the UAE because using left hand when they are eating is considered gross.
Otherwise
, if we have a habit of sitting in the back of a cab,
then
 it is rude in Australia. Without any doubt, not only does the trend of overseas
study
 have the positive aspect but
also
 the downside. We can explore the culture and experience studying facilities.
Nevertheless
, some cultural styles prevent us from managing to modify our lives.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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