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It is said that breakfast is the most important meal of the day. Therefore, schools should provide breakfast for school children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Despite the truth that a balanced diet is essential for children's development, a lot of parents have difficulties to spare their energy and time to provide their children
breakfast
.
However
, some people believe that schools should provide students balanced
breakfast
, I believe that it is not the
school
's responsibility to feed them in the morning.
To begin
 with, it is said that
breakfast
 is the most important meal for pupils and should be given fairly in the schools. While I concede that most of both parents tend to work today and they don't have enough time to give their children a meal in the morning, but the problem is that each
school
 does not have a capacity to manage to feed more than 100 students. In fact, giving
food
 must be done properly that schools sometimes fail. Taking care of children who have allergies,
for instance
, should be monitored carefully what to feed with a professional nutritionist, because an allergic reaction could kill a person in worst case. Another concern of feeding
school
 children is that mass outbreak of
food
 poisoning.
Although
 supporters of
school
 feeding often argue that providing nutritious
food
 for students might improve their academic performance drastically, I argue that the risk of a mass outbreak of
food
 poisoning can be very injurious to children. Not all schools are capable of restoring
food
 under the appropriate environment and tend to bring about the
food
 poisoning to the mass population, which I personally believe that feeding
food
 could be risky for children.
Finally
, probably my strongest argument to disagree with the idea of offering
breakfast
 in
school
 is that the cost schools have to manage. A lot of schools face a financial difficulty and tend to cut the salary of teachers now. Giving
breakfast
 for children, in fact, means that schools must hire cooks and a professional nutritionist that can cost a fortune, which I do not believe that the idea of
school
 offering a meal in the morning. To sum up, not only a
school
 feeding system is unfeasible financially, but it
also
 could give an outbreak of
food
 poisoning.
Therefore
, I disagree with those who believe in
school
breakfast
.
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