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It is said that breakfast is the most important meal of the day. Therefore, schools should provide breakfast for school children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Despite the truth that a balanced diet is essential for children's development, a lot of parents have difficulties to spare their energy and time to provide their children
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, some people believe that schools should provide students balanced
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, I believe that it is not the
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's responsibility to feed them in the morning.
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 with, it is said that
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 is the most important meal for pupils and should be given fairly in the schools. While I concede that most of both parents tend to work today and they don't have enough time to give their children a meal in the morning, but the problem is that each
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 does not have a capacity to manage to feed more than 100 students. In fact, giving
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 must be done properly that schools sometimes fail. Taking care of children who have allergies,
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, should be monitored carefully what to feed with a professional nutritionist, because an allergic reaction could kill a person in worst case. Another concern of feeding
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 children is that mass outbreak of
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 poisoning.
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 supporters of
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 feeding often argue that providing nutritious
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 for students might improve their academic performance drastically, I argue that the risk of a mass outbreak of
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 poisoning can be very injurious to children. Not all schools are capable of restoring
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 under the appropriate environment and tend to bring about the
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 poisoning to the mass population, which I personally believe that feeding
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 could be risky for children.
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, probably my strongest argument to disagree with the idea of offering
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 in
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 is that the cost schools have to manage. A lot of schools face a financial difficulty and tend to cut the salary of teachers now. Giving
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 for children, in fact, means that schools must hire cooks and a professional nutritionist that can cost a fortune, which I do not believe that the idea of
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 offering a meal in the morning. To sum up, not only a
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 feeding system is unfeasible financially, but it
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 could give an outbreak of
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 poisoning.
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, I disagree with those who believe in
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