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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree?

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Each parent has a different way of raising their
child
. Parents around the world have a habit of reading to their
child
 from an early
age
 before they are sent to school, where their reading skills are
further
 developed.
However
, it is argued by some people that participating in fun activities rather than reading would be far more beneficial. I support
this
 notion strongly. The fundamental reason for
this
 is that there is no
age
 of acquiring reading skills, and
this
 can be done when the
child
 feels ready.
Furthermore
, forcing a
child
 to do something will push him away.
For example
, students in the US are forced to read books from an early
age
 and,
as a result
, many grownup boys are reluctant to read.
Besides
, encouraging a
child
 to engage in fun activities,
such
 as playing with toys and arts, develop their creativity and imagination. Through play, youngsters develop cognitive and social skills.
For instance
, they are more likely to learn vocabulary through context in place of reading.
Moreover
, creative and
funny
Suggestion
fun
 games increase youngsters self-confidence and to grow emotionally.
On the contrary
, reading books can be considered boring at a young
age
, and there is no scientific research that proves it is beneficial for
child
 development. In Australia, students spend the
first
 few years at school playing games and entertaining activities and only given a book when they ask for it in the later years, but
this
 has not resulted in Australia lack behind their competitors, in fact, it is one of the highest-ranked countries in terms of reading.
Nevertheless
, bedtime stories are a good way to tell children about different events happening around the world and play an important role in children develop thinking skills. To conclude, I believe that involving a
child
 in entertaining and playful activities,
instead
 of reading, develop superior skills and make the youngster more creative and mature.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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