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Some people think planning future is a waste of time and it is more important to focus on the present. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is much of a discussion going on,
at
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on
 multiple social forums, about whether planning for
future
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the future
 is a waste of time or not. Personally, I agree with the stance and it is better to focus on the present rather than spending time in planning
future
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the future
. Following are some of my reasons to justify that stance. As it was quoted impeccably in a movie; from my childhood, “Past
is
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was
 yesterday, tomorrow is
Future
 but today is a gift
that is
 why it is called a present”.
At
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In
 the present age, peoples’ worries are based upon two factors: one, the tension about how their
future
 will
pane
make a sweeping movement
pan
 out and
second
, how can they correct the mistakes of their pasts.
As a result
, their inner-self gets caught up in a perplexed scenario where they completely forget about their present.
This
 is to say, that the joy of living in
present
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the present
 is lost somewhere around us.
Consequently
, many individuals have suffered ill health mentally as well as physically.
However
, planning about
future
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the future
 is not bad at all, but
instead
 the worry thinking about it brings, is. Plans require
execution
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the execution
 and action and many among us fails to admit that. Plans about what to become, after spending a certain part of your life, are justifiable only to an extent, where an individual take responsibility to make small contributions everyday towards achieving that goal.
Otherwise
, failure to achieve set goals, at any point in one’s journey, can be detrimental to
individual’s mental health
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an individual’s mental health
. As a matter of fact, hospital records have shown a colossal increase in patients with
deteriorated neurological condition
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the deteriorated neurological condition
deteriorated neurological conditions
a deteriorated neurological condition
;
hence
, it is vital to understand the importance of living in the present and
od
engage in
do
of
 whatever it is in your power to make your
future
 bright. To conclude my thoughts, I have strong faith in the benefits that comes
by
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from
with
 living in
present
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the present
 and strongly condemn the idea of worrying about the
future
 much.
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