Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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nd motivating children to outperform others are considered to be two advantages of encouraging

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etiti

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a sense

on in children. Persuading children to compete with each other could result in forcing them to try more, because they attempt to win a math which needs an especial effort.

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, when children endeavor to g

et high

a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)

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high marks

a high mark

hey must study hard. After getting some high score, they try to outperform others at the

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step. It means not only is getting high

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a high mark

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the first person

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, when children grow up, they utilize their ability in re

al life

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abilities

which learned from

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in childhood.

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amplification of

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sense

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in children could pose problems like putting a

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of pressure on them as well as making them selfish and fraudulent. When only thing is about wining, they

become

succeeding with great difficulty

winning

selfish and cheater because they do not help others a

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if it is about studies

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they try to find other alternative way just to win like cheating. As child work hard in studding and

learning

reading carefully with intent to remember

studying

to receive excellent

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k, they put a

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an excellent mark

the excellent mark

excellent marks

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of pressure on themselves. A recent research shows some of student of a

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the student

study at home for 6 hours in a day to achieve success in getting high

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. Learning from each other and

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working skill are argued to be two results of strengthening

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of co-o

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the sense

ing in children. It is obvious that children learn from one another via cooperating.

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, when I was an elementary school child, I learned basketball from my classmate and we learned a

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of basketball skill from each other,

finally

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we arranged a

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and won

first

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place in provincial tournament. Other benefit

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o-operating is learning

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working which is very important these days. Today ability of

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working is necessary to find a good job. In my opinion both

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opinion, both

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and co-operating

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se are im

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portant to nurture children but

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children, but

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operation

rtant than competitive

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.