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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness.

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An essential part of life considered by many is
happiness
.
Happiness
 is difficult to define because everyone has a different perception of
Happiness
 according to their lifestyle.Out of many factors under consideration the most important
factor
 is the
satisfaction
 of life while the other important
factor
 is providing
happiness
 to others for acquiring the feeling of
happiness
.
Firstly
, let us consider the most important
factor
 which is life
satisfaction
. Life
satisfaction
 by many scholars is man key to
happiness
, because according to scholar research the people who tend to live longer acquire the sense of
satisfaction
 with everything they have encountered and perceive them in a more positive way and for every wrong encounter, people that as an experience that they have gained which in return provides them the
satisfaction
 that they have a complete sense of everything rather than ignoring things.
Second
, the most important
factor
 in
self
happiness
 is providing
happiness
 to others because extensive research work has been carried out to study the factors relating to
happiness
 and the most important
factor
 after
self
satisfaction
 is providing the opportunity of satisfying to others which in reward make other people happy.Considering that many people try to console little babies when they are crying is because they want to make their
self
 happy because when the infant smiles it makes the
person
 consoling happy which provide the
person
 a feeling of
satisfaction
. In conclusion, many other factors play a vital role in achieving
happiness
, but the main two leading factors are the
satisfaction
 of ones with themselves and by making other
person
 happy because it provides one's
self
 an achievement of
satisfaction
 which make them happy too.The other considerable factors people may present can be related to wealth, health and travel, but they cannot provide
happiness
 until one is not satisfied and have not made another
person
 satisfied as well.

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