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Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy in life? What other things in life can make people happy?

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It is often thoughts by some people that being wealthy is the major source of happiness in life. In my view, I believe factors
such
 as having good health and families are
also
 responsible for a feeling of satisfaction. Being financially buoyant affords a man basic needs and much more luxurious amenities
such
 as good cars, houses, food and clothing.
This
 result in boosting his ego,
hence
 making him feel happy.
Additionally
, being rich enable him to help the less privileged in the society which in turn makes him influential in the society.
Hence
, having a feeling of contentment.
For example
, a philanthropist in my area, is always happy anytime he visit the orphanage and provides food for the orphans. Admittedly, even though richness has been found to be a source of happiness, another factor
such
 as having good health is
also
 responsible for our state of joy. Good health cannot be purchased. There are several wealthy people who are not happy because they are sick.
For instance
, a wealthy man who had cancer and have spent so much money in order to get better did not improve. At the point of death said "shame to money." Another point to consider is having a good family. Many homes have broken
as a result
 of barrenness.
For example
, I know a couple who is so rich and have spent so much money in order to have their own biological children without any positive result. In conclusion, even though being wealthy makes one happy, it is not the only factor
that is
 responsible for having a sense of fulfilment.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial security
  • Basic needs
  • Comfort
  • Luxury
  • Freedom
  • Altruistic
  • Philanthropy
  • Nurturing relationships
  • Fulfillment
  • Sense of accomplishment
  • Physical well-being
  • Spiritual beliefs
  • Community involvement
  • Gratitude
  • Mindfulness
  • Simple pleasures
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