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More and more people are opting for readymade food instead of freshly cooked food. Does this practice has more advantages than disadvantages? Discuss.

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It is certainly true that the
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 industry has changed the eating and cooking habits of people. Owing to
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, many people prefer to eat canned
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 rather than cooking in their kitchen using fresh vegetables. In my opinion,
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 trend has only a few advantages, but on the greater side, people are compromising with their
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 and taste for the little comfort. One obvious advantage of packaged
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 is that it has saved time of people that was
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 spent in the kitchen for preparing
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. In Asian countries, specifically ladies have to prepare
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 for the whole family and she has to spend more of his day in preparing three times of meal and left with less or no time for other activities of their interest and after sometimes, due to
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 monotonous life, they start feeling mundane.
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, ready-made
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 has made their life relaxed and more comfortable.
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, ready-made packaged
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 is unhealthy for people if consumed regularly because chemicals and preservatives are added in it to make it consumable for a long time, which ultimately have detrimental effects on the
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 of individuals.
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,
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 is the major reason for today's lifestyle diseases
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 as diabetes, hypertension, obesity, cancer and any more.
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, packaged
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 is less tasty than freshly prepared
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, because it loses the natural aroma of ingredients and spices that were used to prepare
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. To conclude, canned
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 has provided ease and convenience for busy people, but it has
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 brought many
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 issues on the
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 of the general public. So in my opinion,
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 trend has more disadvantages than advantages
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