You had some photos of your family taken by a professional photographer. Write a letter to the photographer. In your letter - say that you liked his/her photos of your family - ask him/her to be your photographer at a special family event - give him/her the details of the event.
Dear Jack,
I am writing to express my personal request for you to attend
in
the special day with your exceptional service. Your Change preposition
apply
last
professional work which were
photos satisfied all members of my family, especially my mother's sensitive character. Your job was greatly appreciated and many thanks for your assistance.
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was
Firstly
, let me explain my position. I have a birthday party after a week which is going to take place in a cafe of center garden
. I have invited my colleagues, old friends, neighbours and Correct article usage
the garden
also
some of my parents' relatives who are coming from Turkmenistan. I guess , it will be unforgettable
day for everyone's life, because I have planned more enjoyable things. So I need a professional photographer who Add an article
an unforgettable
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take attractive photos Verb problem
will
from
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of
this
party for
take a look Change preposition
to
or
remember after ten years. And could you separate your time to attend the party Change preposition
at or
in
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on
eleventh
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the eleventh
March
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of March
.
I would be grateful if you could Change the punctuation
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spent
your whole day Change the verb form
spend
for
my birthday. I Change preposition
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hadn't
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haven't
this
work to other photographers , because you are best
one who Add an article
the best
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I know. I hope you won't reject my request. I would appreciate Unnecessary verb
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the opportunity to meet with you to discuss your plans and suitable Change preposition
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cost
for both of us. You can contact me on my mobile phone which is:198837990.
I look forward Fix the agreement mistake
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hearing
from you soon!
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to hearing
Your
sincerely,
Nozigul.Correct the word
Yours
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure your letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion to enhance logical structure. Here, your introduction and body are well defined, but the conclusion can be strengthened by summarizing your request and expressing gratitude once more for the potential service.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use paragraphs to separate different ideas/thoughts. This is done reasonably well in your letter, but make sure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next to maintain a cohesive flow of ideas.
Task Achievement
Address all parts of the task by mentioning how you liked the photographer's work, requesting their services for an event, and providing details about the event. This has been accomplished well, showing good task achievement.
Task Achievement
The tone of your letter is appropriately formal and polite, which is suitable for writing to a professional. However, pay attention to small errors in grammar and punctuation to maintain this formal register.