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Many historic buildings are being destroyed or replaced. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to preserve these buildings?

#buildings
In modern society
architecture
 plays important role in converting the view of
city
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the city
. It has become apparent in recent years, that destroying and replacing historic buildings is an issue that many people feel
strong
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strongly
 about. In
this
 essay the problems surrounding historic buildings, which need to be preserved will be examined in more details. It is widely believed that old buildings are showing the history of
city
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the city
a city
.
For example
, destroying
such
 buildings destroys the memory of
past
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the past
. A good idea would be to create a special committee which will be responsible for preserving old-fashioned buildings. By doing
this
, destroying and replacing historical buildings will be banned. It is certainly true that
historical
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historic
 buildings do not fit into the style of modern
architecture
.
This
 will lead to destroying them or transforming
such
 buildings from one place to another one, in order to be not spoiling the places view. One way to solve
this
 problem will be to reconstruct
such
 buildings to up-to-date view.
As a result
, the historical buildings will not be destroyed. Some people claim that the reason for destroying historic buildings is a shortage of land for constructing new ones.
Such
 activity forces to destroy the historic
architecture
. Government should focus their attention on
way
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a way
ways
the way
 to solve the problem of destroying old construction by creating a new law which will strictly prohibit and protect old
architecture
.
Hence
, nobody will destroy them, because it would be a crime. Taking all these points into consideration, reconstruction, special committee and creating new law will save historical buildings. In my opinion, old constructions
should be strictly controlled be
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should strictly control be
should strictly controlled be
 government.
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