Some people think that the most important thing the rich can do with his money is to help people. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Money
is very crucial thing as well
as, everyone can
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, as everyone can
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
their basic needs. Some people think that rich people have a great power because they have more
money
. I agree with
this
statement.
To
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Two
began with, everyone cannot buy happiness when they have
money
.
However
, poor people have to face many problems because they are unable to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
their families basic needs.
Secondly when
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Secondly, when
they commit crimes so with the power of
money
they can
easy
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easily
to
safe
save from ruin, destruction, or harm
save
their life and poor people have always
suffer
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suffered
that type of problems. Sometime people have a lot of
money
on
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at
in
for
that time some people have a kind heart. So they can help the poor people and invest their
money
to improve the education system.
This
surgery was carried in
US
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the US
approximately 80% people like to help the poor people To conclude,
although
everyone
donot have
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does not have
do not have
enough
money but
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money, but
those persons who have a lot of
money
they can easy to spend
laxurary
something that is an indulgence rather than a necessity
luxury
lifestyle.

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