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History is not useful in our life. Do you agree or disagree?

#history #life
It is argued that
history
 is not playing
great role
Suggestion
a great role
 in our everyday life and
this
 subject is not useful.
This
 essay disagrees with
this
 statement because
history
 is very valuable for several reasons: for gaining knowledge and for avoiding mistakes in the
future
. It is widely believed that by learning
past people
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past, people
 can get useful information.
Most
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The most
 of important findings
such
 as algebra, geometry, physics and chemistry were discovered thousand years ago. Because these openings were decades ago, it can be considered as
history
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historical
.
For example
, most of the schools
teaches
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teach
are teaching
 their students
this
 lesson just for knowledge. It is certainly true that humanity
did
produced by a manufacturing process
made
 a lot of mistakes in the previous times. If civilization will take these facts into the consideration,
such
 errors like holocaust, different wars will have a great chance to not appear in the
future
. Because people will be able to understand to which disadvantages it could lead our world. Due
this
 humanity will make
effort
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an effort
the effort
 to
do not
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do, not
 repeat
such
 doings for our better
future
. A recent study found that more than 60% learning by
analyzing
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
 their or
others
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 mistakes, which will help them to avoid negative consequences again. In conclusion,
history
 has a lot of advantages
for
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of
 a society,
such
 as gaining useful information and avoiding negative effects in the
future
 by learning fails in the past.
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