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Many people believe that the current system of both teachers and students in the classroom will no longer exist by the year 2050. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

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Education plays a vital role in the life of students as well as teachers. A recent rise in the online learning has resulted in a system where the dynamics of student's and teacher's working are drastically changed.
This
 essay will discuss these changing trends between the two with the evolution of technology. In recent times, people prefer to study online. With the advancement in technology many people are opting for online studies rather than going to classrooms, since it is more effective and convenient.
For instance
, they can simply login to websites and study without leaving their homes and to understand the topic better they can repeat the lectures on the laptop. A recent study has shown that online learning is nearly 20 percentage more effective than attending classrooms.
Although
 there are many aspects in which the online learning precedes the classrooms, there are some aspects of on campus studying that can never be replaced by online studies.
Firstly
, some subjects requires performing practical examinations, which can never be done via internet. To exemplify, subjects in science, namely, physics and chemistry require students to perform experiments in labs.
Secondly
, some subjects require people's interactions as a part of the subject which cannot be achieved through online education.
For instance
, subjects
such
 as mass communication require students to interact with people in person. To summarise, there are many aspects of current campus based education that will be replaced by online learning in the future.
This
 essay discussed despite the major studying paradigm will move towards online education, some aspects of campus based learning is irreplaceable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • virtual reality
  • augmented reality
  • traditional teaching methods
  • personalized learning
  • AI (Artificial Intelligence)
  • global connectivity
  • online platforms
  • obsolete
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • digital classrooms
  • economic factors
  • maintaining physical school buildings
  • online learning environments
  • social interaction
  • practical learning experiences
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