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Government should spend more money on education than sports. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is an ongoing debate about the sector of the economy that governments should spend more money on. Some people believe more cash should be spent on education rather than sports. In my opinion, more resources should be spent on sports.
To begin
, most countries are investing more in sports due to the many benefits associated with it.
Firstly
, spending more money on sports helps to showcase a
country
 to the world through its athletes.
In other words
, during huge sporting events like the Olympics and world cup, athletes that do well, portrays their nation in a positive light.
Secondly
, a state whose infrastructure is up to standard may have the opportunity to host one of the games and
that is
 a high boost for that
country
 socially as a lot of tourists will come to explore. Another point to consider is the economical value investing more in sports brings to a nation. A
country
 with lots a gold medal
to
Suggestion
in
 its name, most of the time attract foreign investors whose influx of resources boost the economy.
For example
, in 2017 when Nigeria won the
last
 world cup, the Business Men Association recorded 15 foreign investors who planted roots there.
Furthermore
, top athletes are seen as role models and
as a result
 of
this
, most companies use them to advertise their products. To conclude,
although
 education is as important as sports as sectors of the economy is concerned, I believe that more money should be spent on sports as
this
 will bring positivity, tourists, and revival to a
country
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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