Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In modern society, some
people
believe that the main environmental problems of our time are the loss
of species
of plants
and animals
, while
other people
argue that there are more important environmental problems. In my opinion, I personally believe that there are more critical issues
than the loss
of species
.
On the one hand, I agree that the extinction of plants
and animals
is the most serious environmental issue. In fact, plants
and animals
are interrelated, therefore
the loss
of one species
can lead to the loss
of other species
. For example
, if plants
died
, many of the herbivores that feed off it will Wrong verb form
die
also
die, while
many carnivores will die because of the dead
of herbivores. Replace the word
death
Additionally
, the loss
of species
will reduce biodiversity. Biodiversity is important because certain species
have important applications in medicine and chemical industries.
On the other hand
, some people
consider that there are more serious environmental issues
, such
as water pollution
, air
pollution
and the effect of climate changed
. Replace the word
change
For example
, many people
have respiratory disease in China because of air
pollution
. Statistics indicated
that more than 13 Wrong verb form
indicate
percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
people
died
each year because of Wrong verb form
die
the
Correct article usage
apply
air
pollution
. Additionally
, global warming is a serious environmental issue, if the earth continues to experience rising, it will start to become uninhabitable for human
, especially for Fix the agreement mistake
humans
marines’
Change noun form
marines
animals
.
By way of conclusion, I personally believe that there are more important environmental issues
such
as air
pollution
and global warming, although
the loss
of species
of plants
and animals
is the most serious environmental issues
.Fix the agreement mistake
issue
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Content
The essay demonstrates confusion in the personal stand. The statement 'In my opinion, I personally believe that there are more critical issues than the loss of species.' contradicts later when the writer calls species loss 'the most serious environmental issues.'
Development
The ideas presented in some instances are not developed fully. For example, 'Biodiversity is important because certain species have important applications in medicine and chemical industries.' could have been further explained.
Grammar
'Effect of climate changed' needs to be revised to 'effects of climate change'. Check grammar carefully.
Sentence Construction
'it will start to become uninhabitable for human, especially for marines’ animals.' - this sentence structure is incorrect. Try revising sentences for management of ideas.