The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.
On
this
point graph
we could see the statistics of multiple enquiries received in certain city Add a comma
,graph
Tourist
Information Office
over a
half a year in 2011.
It is obvious from the data given from the diagram that the most unpopular way for people trying to connect Correct article usage
apply
Tourist
Information office
was writing
an email. People who are using Change preposition
by writing
this
type of communication with office
Correct article usage
the office
liked
winter Wrong verb form
like
month
from January to February more to plan their holidays. We can see numbers which talking us that they are calling from 800 to 650 times a Fix the agreement mistake
months
month
till March and then
just falling lower and lower stopped
on nearly 370 calls a Wrong verb form
stopping
month
.
Opposite, the most popular way to call the Tourist
Office
was meeting
Change preposition
by meeting
travel
agent in Correct article usage
a travel
person
. The number of such
customers
was growing exponentially from January to June 2011. This
type of people was more loyal to plan
their trips in Spring or Summer Wrong verb form
planning
what
we can see represented by 1200 to 1900 meetings Correct pronoun usage
which
were
placed in Unnecessary verb
apply
office
from April to June.
Only the second
place on
took the telephone type of communication. For the Change preposition
apply
all reviewed
period there were many more phone calls than emails, but a little bit Add a hyphen
all-reviewed
less
than meetings in Correct quantifier usage
fewer
person
. From
all Change preposition
Of
the
three types of communications, enquiries received by telephone were the most homogenous Correct article usage
apply
distributed
in time. There were not Correct word choice
and distributed
such
leaps as in
Add a hyphen
in-person
person
meeting numbers. These customers
were active quite often. But as the customers
who talked with travel agent
personally, they Fix the agreement mistake
agents
more
preferred Correct quantifier usage
apply
warm
Correct article usage
a warm
month
to plan their holidays Fix the agreement mistake
months
what
we can see comparing Correct pronoun usage
apply
from
800 to 1000 calls from January to April 2011 to numbers increasing to 1600 calls a Change preposition
apply
month
from April to June.
In conclusion, we can say that there were more customers
that were interested in tourist
information for Spring and summer months than winter months and most of enquiries
were received by phone or in Add an article
the enquiries
person
, not by letter or email.Submitted by wav.tatarskii on
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