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Even though globalization affects the world's economies in a very positive way, its negative side should not be forgotten. What is your view? Discuss. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Despite the positive effects of
globalisation
, its drawbacks to the world’s economies should be considered. I agree with
this
 statement that governments should allow international companies, but they
also
 support local businesses. I
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 that
globalisation
have
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has
 many advantages stems from technology. The
first
 advantage is more production. Because modern technology and global industry have more capacity to build more goods.
For instance
, a car factory is able to
product
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produce
thousands
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thousand
 cars in a week due to their advanced machines. The
second
 advantage is more
quality
 products which make global companies. Again, they have high
quality
 cars compared to local brands. It can be the
third
 advantage of
globalisation
 is less costly products. For that
reasons
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reason
,
globalisation
have
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has
 many positive sides.
On the other hand
, it has some detrimental effects on local businesses. Some local brands might be close and some local products may disappear, because they cannot compete with international companies. It is not easy for local industries
to have
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have
 the same
quality
 and the same number of multinational products with low costs.
Hence
, global firms might delete
local ones
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the local ones
. I think we should support
globalisation
 due to the productivity in the industry, more
quality
 and cheaper
goods
Accept comma addition
goods, however
however
, local products should be protected and supported by governments. These are might be some tax reduces or long term credits with low interest rates. In conclusion, positive effects of
globalisation
 are obvious;
however
, it threats local brands.
Therefore
, in order to protect our local
companies
Suggestion
companies'
 governments should support them.
Therefore
, local firms live longer.

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